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Today, the weather is bright and there are no dark clouds in the sky. I decide to take a walk in Montrose Water Sports Park, which is just a short distance from where I reside. I come to this decision because it is a Saturday afternoon, and I am feeling bored in the house and I am not interested in watching a movie or listening to music. Therefore, I finally realize that I should spend a day for relaxing in the park. After wearing my white sneakers and packing a few things in my black backpack, I am ready to leave. I enjoy that the park will be interesting, because the last visit at this Park was boring and the weather changed rapidly, and soon it started snowy. After twelve minutes of walking, I am at the main gate of the Park. I am entering the big park and looking around, I see that the park is full of people and there are plenty of activities going on. With this scene, I smile because I know I will have a nice time at the park.

In the park, I slowly walk towards the edge of the where I sit on a bench that had not been occupied. The reason I chose to sit on the edge of the park is because this area was raised and it was a beautiful watching spot. Sitting in this area, I feel very comfortable because it gives me a much wider and beautiful view of the entire park. I slowly open my backpack and take out some snacks that I brought from home. On the yard that is on my right side, there is a group of family member seat and there having a picnic. At the center, they lay a white cloth on which they place several delicacies. Apart from the red velvet cake, which catch my attention, the white cloth also has tiny sandwiches, cedar cheese and two apples. According to me, this scene was too beautiful. Therefore, I pull out my cell phone and take a picture of that moment.

At the far end, there is a little boys playing soccer game. The way they are playing is evident that they have no clue on the basic rules of the game. They are all on the pitch scrambling for the ball, including the boy who is mean to be the goalkeeper. While scrambling for the ball, one of the boys falls on his belly and begins crying. The boys stop playing and they start staring, not at the boy, but at the far end of the pitch. I see a lady, she is wearing a blue pair of trousers and a green cardigan on top of a white tank top, heads to the pitch to right to the crying boy who had already stood up. After wiping dirt of the boy's clothes, she grabs his arm and they head for the main gate.

At the center of the Park, I stand on the bridge across the large river and I see the man sits on the white water kayaking playing in the waves and eddies in the river. It seems like dangerous, but it is really cool. I grab my phone and take a picture of the river, I look at my phone and it is thirty minutes to six  o'clock, I realize that is no longer on my side, and I have to go home. I slowly walk out of the Park and I feel like the day had finally ended well and I really had a great time for relaxing at the park.