Project Description
Detailed description of the problem. Clear to reader why problem is significant and how it has been solved in the past. Answers (1) problem being solved, (2) why the solution is needed (3) who will use it, (4) discussed existing design solutions for your problem
So, that problem is that, most of the new cars don't come with a spare tire + jack and I'm trying to design a mobility kit(spare tire,jack and lug wrench) to solve the problem!
Why problem is significant and how it has been solved in the past?
Take a look at what I have done to understand what's going on.
I will put the comments when I wrote this to avoid them!!
use the resources that I put at the end of my paper! And any other resources!
I want a technical paper please!
These are the comments I got:
-FIRST PARAGRAPH IS THE PROBLEM. SECOND WHY IS A SOLUTION NEEDED. THIRD IS POSSIBLE SOLUTIONS.
-YOU MUST THINK OF THIS PAPER AS IF SOMEONE WHO KNOWS NOTHING IS READING THIS. EXPLAIN IN DEPTH. MORE INFORMATION IS BETTER THAN NO INFORMATION.
-Fix the way of introducing the project description. This is not an English essay. It's a technical paper
-This is not an essay - this is a technical paper. Define the PROBLEM in a TECHNICAL FORMAT. LOGICAL AND PROPER.
-Before mentioning the solution, explain why the problem is significant.Give data on the percentage of cars that get stuck on the roads annually. You have this, so talk about it before the solution.
-WHAT IS THE DESIGN PROBLEM. WHAT SOLUTION IS NEEDED. WHO WILL USE THIS SOLUTION.
-NO! THIS IS NOT PROPER FORMAT FOR A TECHNICAL PAPER. USE IN A QUOTE THAT COULD BE SHORTENED ONLY.
-what do you mean by long wait?? an hour? 30 minutes? 2 hours? could you be a little more specific? please
-you have only mention AAA, you have not mention any other type of road side assistance service. Could you please add more about other services?
-we are doing third person only. Not "you" that's second person, tried to write this on another way. Also, the punctuation at the of the sentence, you shouldn't use "!".
-WHAT OTHER ROAD SIDE ASSISTANT SERVICES AS WELL. ONE SOURCE IS NOT ENOUGH.