For my english class, we are writing a description essay about a place. I chose to do it on a park near my house.
This is my thesis statement so far: Mile Square Park is a beautiful place.
I'm thinking of changing it to "Mile Square Park, to me, is one of the most beautiful places in the world." It sounds too opinionated though.
How can I improve my thesis statement? In my body paragraphs, I described the park using the 5 senses. I wrote my essay in spatial and chronological form (First, I described the park [trees, flowers, grass, etc], then the pond, then the playground)