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It's 5am and my father is up and ready to open one of five our convenience stores. After a few hours of working, he will rotate his time to the others to conduct business paperwork there as well. Meanwhile, my mother will make her daily run to the bank for the store deposits, and while out shop for any necessary inventory needed for the stores. After completing her errands, she will head back home to prepare dinner.
Although this might seem like a fairly easy day for my parents, but the success came to them after a great deal of labor and patience. Both my parents worked many odds jobs prior to owning a business, which wasn't easy either. My dad dedicated a lot of his time to gain more experience and grow his business to what it is now. And although he might have missed a few events in my life because of work, he has done so to provide a better future for my brother and me.
Because I am a first generation college student, my parents weren't able to help me much in my decisions besides supporting what I chose to do. I moved to a new city at age 18 and soon felt homesick, being extremely family orientated I just felt alone. The lack of 1-on-1 interaction made college more challenging. Cut off from the company of my family and friends. I frequently found myself having nervous breakdowns. My freshman year I was involved in a terrible car wreck and missed a two of lectures and exams. This lead to a decline in my grades, which was really hard to recover from. The only thing that really kept me going was my parents.
Both my parents hold the will and stamina to overcome any challenges that comes their way. Growing up, I watched them work constantly; they missed so many milestones in my life. They did not get a chance to watch my brother and I grow. They were always at work, and it was all for us to give us an education that they never got an opportunity to have. Seeing them make so many sacrifices for their family and social life has kept me motivated. I do not want their hard work to go to waste. I want to succeed, for them and for me.
From my parents' work ethic, I learned to set my goals high. I want to become a physician and to not let anything come in the way.They inspired me to overcome challenges to reach my goal to improve my grades and transfer to a better school and get a job to gain medical experience. I have gained much experience and learned my strengths and weaknesses from following my their footsteps. The motivation and work ethics my parents have moved on to me will aid me to stay committed to helping patients and fulfill my duties as a physician.