Revise and analyze the strengths and weaknesses of each sentence and revise the document so that it follows this chapter's guidelines.
The message was written by the marketing manager of an online retailer of baby-related products in the hope of becoming a retail outlet for Inglesina strollers and high chairs. As a manufacturer of stylish, top quality products, Inglesina (based in Italy) is extremely selective about the retail outlets through which it allows its products to be sold.
This is the message that needs revising answer question 1 and 2.
Our e-tailing company, Best Baby Gear, specializes in only the very best products for parents of newborns, infants, and toddlers.We constantly scour the world looking for products the are good enough and well-built enough and classy enough-good enough that is to take their place alongside the hundreds of other carefully selected products that adorn the pages of out award-winning website, www.bestbabygear.com. We aim for the fences every time we select a product to join this portfolio; we don't want to waste out time with onesey-twosey products that might sell a half dozen units per annum-no, we want every product to be a top-drawer success, selling at least one hundred units per specific model per year in order to justify our expense and hassle factor in adding it to the abovementioned portfolio.
After careful consideration, we thusly concluded that your Inglesina lines meet our needs and would therefore like to add it.