Please review the following assignment...the DD will say tomorrow but please be advised that it is needed NOW(today Oct 15).

Assignment:

Imagine that your manager wants to send a brief email message and wants your feedback on how it can be improved. The purpose of the email is to welcome new employees to the organization.

Your manager has asked you to review the email and provide feedback. Reflect on what you learned in the unit about the importance of stating your purpose, of using appropriate tone, and of organization of the message so that writing is more effective.

There is no need to rewrite the email, simply evaluate the message on the following

Is the tone appropriate?

Is the purpose made clear at the start?

Is it logically organized?

Email:

Hey there guys,

You'll find that our organizational culture is warm and inviting. People love working here. It will be nice to meet you finally when we can shake hands properly. I'm pleased to get to know you, and I for one will do my best to sell you on how amazing our company is. I wanted to take a quick second to welcome you ASAP to our little family.

Yours truly,
Chris