I think that the paragraph could be better focused on the topic by tying in globalization more and concept of globalization more and how exactly it has effected the evolution of terrorism. Although I discuss technology and communication advancements in terms of terrorism and its developments, I think I could use technology and communication advancements to discuss globalization because so much of globalization has occurred because of technological advances. Focusing in on main topic sentence from the introduction as well. Your introduction discusses positives and negatives views towards globalization and how many people have started to embrace it but then in the paragraph I talks about the expansion of terrorism which is definitely not something people embrace so I just clarify how that relates to my introduction. Need help. No plagiarism
Introduction
The impact of globalization to our generation is like a double-edged sword; there are both positive and negative consequences. The society has had different and changing views on globalization. At some point, it faced great opposition and only had the support of a few pioneers. The situation, however, has changed today and it has become a necessity to embrace it. A comparison between the scenario in the 15th century and today would show that there far much greater advancements than there were back then in fields such as communication, mass media and terrorism media.
Paragraph
Globalization has led to terrorist to be present practically everywhere in the world rather than when they were situated in only specific countries. For example, the writer Michael Kimmel in his exposition "Gender, Class and Terrorism" examine the world is changing the people no matter their gender, beliefs and sexual orientation and are taking away jobs and how we have to fight against them. However, I do not agree with his opinion about job scarce and that doesn't give the whites/supremacist to treat or kill individuals. On an interview, myself conducted I ask my speaker Bolton to tell me about terrorism in terms of globalization and gender in the 15 and 21 centuries using communication mode. He states that terrorism in the 15 centuries was quite slow and lessly effective due to limited advanced communication strategies. On the other hand, in the 21-century terrorism has become wide and effective as terrorists are in a position to communicate effectively and efficiently. Hence increases the chances and the impact of the attacks to do technological advances. In addition to this woman, have also become actively involved in terrorist at=activities which was mainly associated with men only. This has scale the terrorism menace to greater height in the 21-century compared to the 15th century. Similar as, Kimmel who states how role gender and opportunities in the middle class and how it has work on powder keg. The terror has created a way to struggle for the people to have economic and culture.