Flabby Expressions

Your Task. Revise the following sentences to eliminate flabby expressions.

a) We are sending a revised proposal at this point in time due to the fact that building costs have jumped at a considerable rate.

b) In the normal course of events, we would seek additional funding; however, in view of the fact that rates have increased, we cannot.

Long Lead-Ins

Your Task. Revise the following to eliminate long lead-ins.

a) This is an announcement to tell you that all computer passwords must be changed every six months for security purposes.

b) We are sending this memo to notify everyone that anyone who wants to apply for telecommuting may submit an application immediately.

There is/are and it is/was Fillers

Your Task. Revise the following to avoid unnecessary there is/are and it is/wasfillers.

a) There is a password-checker that is now available that can automatically evaluate the strength of your password.

b) It is careless or uninformed individuals who are the most vulnerable to computer hackers.

Redundancies

Your Task. Revise the following to avoid redundancies.

a) Because his laptop was small in size, he could carry it everywhere.

b) A basic fundamental of computer safety is to avoid storing your password on a file in your computer because criminals will look there first.

Buried Verbs

Your Task. Revise the following to recover buried verbs.

a) After making an investigation, the fire department reached the conclusion that the blaze was set intentionally.

b) Our committee made a promise to give consideration to your proposal at its next meeting.