Entrepreneurship is concept that I am very knowledgeable about as I engaged in entrepreneurship for nearly eight years of my life before working at my current position. The role of an entrepreneur is a three pronged role that requires astute business sense, charisma and good people skills, and a resilient mindset that isn't afraid of failure or rejection. == okay, this is not bad; you seem to have the right idea about what I want in this assignment. Your topic is fine, and the qualities are mostly okay. The problem is that the wording of the second one ("charisma and good people skills") makes it sound like you are naming two right there, for a total of four. So please reword this to eliminate that confusion. As for this next paragraph, that goes off on the wrong track. Take the sentences which pertain to each of the three qualities and use them as you prepare those respective body paragraphs. Eliminate the rest.
Within this paper a discussion about how those with these three qualities are the most prosperous small business owners will be conducted. The ability to have astute business sense is something that all entrepreneurs' must maintain as it enables them to recognize good business deals for their business and avoid those that could cause disaster. Charisma is necessary for interacting with both customers and suppliers alike as well as potential investors. Any entrepreneur that wishes to be successful must be resilient as 80% of start-up businesses are unsuccessful while 90% of second start-ups succeed but only 10% of entrepreneur's attempt a second business start-up.