Correct the following thesis statement based on the question listed and notes:

Question: Discuss the artifact record keeping strategies and practices of archaeologists and excavators in comparison to modern day bookkeeping strategies and practices for businesses. for example those of the Hypostyle Hall or ancient Greek Parthenon.

Thesis Statement (need correction) :These days we have computers and other technology used for record keeping while earlier they used to have different kinds of writing systems where they used to count manually and would sometimes use pictures or symbols for record-keeping. Bookkeeping procedures such as Abacus, Papyrus, and double-entry bookkeeping were among the famous types of methods used in Hypostyle Hall or Greek Parthenon.

Notes:

a thesis will work more effectively if it is expressed in a single sentence. Here, we have two sentences. This is usually a sign that we need to think a little more about our topics to distill our ideas into a main point. This is very common in the early stages of drafting! And I wouldn't worry too much about it at all until you're a little further along with your research and drafting.

At that point, challenge yourself to express your paper's main idea in a single sentence.
Second -- and this is something we have to watch for in particular with history papers -- take a closer look at your second sentence. This is a factual statement rather than a thesis statement because it expresses an inarguable state. Facts are not arguable: they are either correct or incorrect. If we say the capital of the US is Washington, DC, we have stated a correct fact. Nobody will try to persuade us that the capital of the US is actually some other city, and even if they tried, they would be stating an incorrect fact.

A thesis statement instead should state a position. A position rests on facts, but it is not itself a fact. Washington, DC, is the capital of the US, and that is a fact, but it would be possible to take a position on whether DC should also be a state, and to support that position with more facts.