Read the following email draft a paper:
- Analyze the strengths and weaknesses of each sentence.
- Revise the message so that it follows the guidelines outlined in your textbook.
- Utilize the 8 steps to enhance the clarity of the message (Bovée & Thill, 2018, pp. 160-162).
The message was written by the marketing manager of an online retailer of baby products in the hope of becoming a retail outlet for Inglesina strollers and high chairs. As a manufacturer of stylish, top-quality products, Inglesina (based in Italy) is extremely selective about the retail outlets through which it allows its products to be sold.
Email Example to analyze:
Our e-tailing site, www.BestBabyGear.com, specializes in only the very best products for parents of newborns, infants, and toddlers. We constantly scour the world looking for products that are good enough and well-built enough and classy enough- good enough to take their place alongside the hundreds of other carefully selected products that adorn the pages of our award-winning website, Bestbabygear.
We aim for the fences every time we select a product to join this portfolio; we don't want to waste our time with onesey-twosey products that might sell a half dozen units per annum- no, we want every product to be a top-drawer success, selling at least one hundred units per speci?c model per year in order to justify our expense and hassle factor in adding it to the above mentioned portfolio. After careful consideration, we thusly concluded that your Inglesina lines meet our needs and would therefore like to add it. (Bove´e & Thill, 2018, p.149)
Bove´e, C. L., & Thill, J. V. (2018). Business communication today (14th ed.). Upper Saddle River, NJ: Prentice Hall.